Ayxxia - Warhammer Fluff Fanfiction ^_^

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Ayxxia - Warhammer Fluff Fanfiction ^_^

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Hey guys

Yeah, so I had an exam yesterday and I finished 30 minutes early. With little else to do with my time, I started to just write away.

Basically fluff about my RPG character (who still hasnt been selected for a group yet /grumbles).

Criticise all you want, I'll make it polished if you do ;)

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Ayxxia moved silently but with a ferocious speed that did not display a hint of exhaustion or faultering. She had been running for nearly an hour now in the moonlight, flanked by two shades. Sethwind and Cobalt kept pace with their leader demonstrating their physical finesse and fervour. Ayxxia's purple and red eyes glowed as did the now uncovered rose tatoo over her left breast. Her black sea dragon cloak flew wildly behind her, revealing an expanse of delicately white skin that had a bluish hue. Black metal plated shoulder pads, a breast plate, skirt and knee-high boots providing only a means of concealing necessary items. In her scant attire, over a hundred contraptions lay, each a means of taking a life. a smile crept across her beautiful face, a terrifying and unparralelled look that spoke two words

"So close."

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Kurt Von Wichten collapsed next to his dying horse. It lay panting for a moment but gave up breathing, lifeless in the snow. Kurt panted looking around desperately for some sign of life that he knew followed him. Slowly rising to his feet like an anebriated drunk out of sheer exhaustion, Kurt pulled out of his belt a flintlock pistol. Checking its firing capabilities were in order, Kurt drew his dueling rapier and backed up against the snow coated bough of a gigantic tree. Through the pitch black of midnight, Kurt could feel eyes staring at him, yet he heard nothing. Straining every sense, the tense air was unnerving. Kurt broke the silence with a wordless bellow, firing his pistol into the night. A rewarding thud was all that came after the thunderous crack of the blackpowder weapon. Laughing hysterically, Kurt ran to the source, only to find the corpse of a bloodied raven. Suddenly, a stabbing feeling hit his chest and back. Looking down, Kurt saw several bolts protruding from his chest. Looking up again, the moonlight revealed a flawlessly beautiful druchii, scantly clad with a smile on her perfect face. In an instant she was at his side. Kurt, unable to breathe hesitated.

The last thing Kurt Von Wichten's eyes saw was a deep red blade slowly driving into his heart.
Ayxxia the Shade is hiding in the shadows and waiting to attack...

Best way to get rid of a treeman is wait until the owner has it on the table in front of him and then kick him very hard in the groin from behind. When he doubles up and smacks his face intoit, he should wreck the treeman and it will teach the little bastard not to run a treeman at 750

Its the Druchii way of gaming!
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Post by Arellion sapher »

I tend to max out on environmental description in everything I write, but I'd still add a little more scene-setting stuff. Snow crunches in a very sinister way. It would be nice for Kurt to be stumbling around making a lot of noise and then pausing... straining his ears... had that been him?
Panic is great to write in the midwinter.
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Post by Sezax »

In my opinion Dark Elves create totally best enviroment for Fanfiction, especially yaoi and yuri ( slash ).
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Post by Yemeth »

Dark elves would be even better for guro fanfics, imho.
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Post by Sleekdd »

I don't know yuri, yaoi nor guro I'm afraid so I can't comment on that. If that's the story you put out in half an hour, I can say I'm impressed. I wouldn't have gotten that far seeing as I've got a pretty consistent case of writer's block.

Anyway, if you're looking to work some more on your story, I'd advise you to work more on fleshing out your characters and the environments.
Stories like yours rely on a single event and in this case, it is helpful if you can engage the reader in this snapshot of a character's life. You could do this either in the perspective of Ayxxia and put down her thoughts and considerations while she tracks and hunts down her quarry. You could focus on Kurt and his fear - paranoia even - that twists every single sound and sight into a potential threat. Or you could focus on one of the shades, Sethwind or Cobalt and describe how they see Ayxxia.

Anyway, those are just ideas if you were thinking on fleshing out the story.
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Post by Sezax »

Yuri is japanesse form of slash ( erotic/romantic art ) when it comes to ,,girl on girl stuff. ( I would place it to Convents of Sorceresses, the Cult of the Witch Elves of Khaine etc. )

yaoi is about boy/boy love, it can very soft (extremely romantic ) or extremely hardcore ( violance, tormenting etc.)

Place full of treachery, slavery, hatred, cults of excess and hatred is perfect place for such stories in my opinion.
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Post by Yemeth »

As for guro, it is probably the most 'extreme' form of... japanese 'erotic art'. IT features murder, heavy torture and abuse, gutting, vivsections, amputation etc.

If this topic proves anything, it's the ability of anything to converge towards porn.


Sry for the OT.
What SleekDD said.. (note that I enjoyed it very much).
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Post by Linkinhearts666 »

thanks fer your compliments and criticisms guys! ^_^ preciate it.


If this topic proves anything, it's the ability of anything to converge towards porn.


Thankyou Yemeth. THankyou very much ahaha
Ayxxia the Shade is hiding in the shadows and waiting to attack...

Best way to get rid of a treeman is wait until the owner has it on the table in front of him and then kick him very hard in the groin from behind. When he doubles up and smacks his face intoit, he should wreck the treeman and it will teach the little bastard not to run a treeman at 750

Its the Druchii way of gaming!
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